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Writing a Solid 1st Sentence


 

Tips for Writing a Solid Lead Sentence

It's no secret that a first impression lasts longer than any other. You've always heard that Chapter 1 is especially important because it draws in readers (including agents and publishers!) however, your lead sentence can often be even more important, as it makes your true first impression.

Don't Lead With the Weather

It was a dark and stormy night. It was a sunny and clear day. It was a partly cloudy and humid morning. 
Does any of that matter to the plot of your story? Even in the cases where the weather does matter, is it such an integral part as to warrant being the first thing mentioned?

The fact that weather is the epitome of "small talk" precludes it from capturing any attention. Yes, setting the scene is important but it can be done gradually throughout the text with greater success. Leading with character or plot is typically a much better way to pull the reader into the story.
 
For example, the opening sentence
of The Trial by Franz Kafka is:
“Someone must have been telling lies about Joseph K., for without having done anything wrong he was arrested one fine morning.”

You can easily discern certain meaty elements of the story: a potential protagonist, a potential antagonist and the fact that there are lies, which always create complexity. If Kafka had decided to lead with scene instead of a gripping plot point you may have a better view of Joseph K.'s bedroom, but you'd be much less likely to have continued reading. 

Get Philosophical

You can take the philosophical route like Tolstoy does in Ana Karenina:
“Happy families are all alike; every unhappy family is unhappy in its own way.”
 
It challenges readers to think about the statement as it pertains to their own lives and families. One may either agree or disagree with the statement, either way the highly charged nature of the sentence builds solid intrigue.

Set the Tone of the Story

From Slaughterhouse Five by Kurt Vonnegut:
“All this happened, more or less. The war parts, anyway, are pretty much true.”

The information you get from this lead is that the story is centered around a war theme and that there is some confusion or ambiguity in the mind of the narrator. It’s short. It’s to the point. And it introduces a style that sets the tone of the entire novel.

Don't Dwell On It

There are an infinite number of possibilities for your first sentence, many of which you will not even be able to see until after the entire story has taken shape. That being said, pick one and move on. Write the draft of the story and during edit, pay close attention to that important lead sentence. Does it still match the tone of the story you've written? You can always tighten it up in the editing process.

Make it Original

If the first sentence you have on the paper is identical or very similar to any you have read before (example: 'Once upon a time' or a buzzing alarm clock) you need to toss it out and start again. Your opening is like the face of your story and an unoriginal open is like a cheap Halloween mask. Many readers will (correctly or incorrectly) identify your story as a copy of some other and likely assume that it has nothing new to offer.

 

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Reader Comments

Ms. Nine @ Wednesday, May 16 2012 7:01 AM Flag Inappropriate
Great article and examples. If you're going to write about the weather in your first sentence, you must create tension. You need characters for that. --It could have been the perfect morning for taking a brisk walk, but not for Lisa. --

Indira Nankoosingh @ Saturday, May 05 2012 12:05 PM Flag Inappropriate
This is very helpful. I will definitely remember that on writing my future stories.

J.A.Houser @ Monday, April 30 2012 12:42 PM Flag Inappropriate
Thanks for the advice.

charnay @ Sunday, February 05 2012 5:24 PM Flag Inappropriate
Great advice. My opening line takes place at the onset of a going-away party. Te opening line: Okay.

Linda Pickens Phalen @ Sunday, October 30 2011 11:44 PM Flag Inappropriate
Thank You so much for the great advice. I will always try to base my stories on the FIRST Sentence from now on. I hope everyone will read and review my newest short story... "The Trucker And The Author" I am an aspiring Author and I want to THANK AuthorStand Agina for all the help! Thank You!:):):)

Ken Atkinson @ Thursday, September 22 2011 8:32 PM Flag Inappropriate
Great article; a nice and quick summary of how to make a story grip you like a vice. Very informative and helpful. Thanks! :D

Lucy @ Wednesday, September 21 2011 8:17 PM Flag Inappropriate
First page, first paragraph, and first sentence get the most edits in revisions and rewrites. Current WIP: "Ashes to Music" "Dropping out of sight, two boys slipped behind the corner of the old house. Hearts pounding with excitement, they waited until they were sure no one saw them."

Rhonda Tardif @ Sunday, September 18 2011 5:29 AM Flag Inappropriate
Great article. I like it when examples are given. It clarifies for me. I like Amy Druschke's comment.

Amy Druschke @ Friday, September 16 2011 12:26 AM Flag Inappropriate
This is well said. Also when one describes a person to the 'T' in a whole page! Leave some of that character to my imagination and gradually introduce things like eye color, hair length and color, glasses, height, weight. Gosh! It gets to be annoying, come up with creative ways to talk about looks.

cathy @ Thursday, September 15 2011 10:39 PM Flag Inappropriate
good artical. I was having issues with my first chapter especailly the opening this helps some.

Dee Jordan @ Thursday, September 15 2011 8:27 PM Flag Inappropriate
Great article and wonderful opening sentences. How would you rate this one for my novel In and Out of Madness? (Sneakaboard Press 2009 on Amazon and Kindle.) One of us must die.

John Grabowski @ Monday, September 12 2011 12:46 PM Flag Inappropriate
Call me Ishmael.

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